I'm pleased to see you've set up a Vimeo account. You can actually embed the video in your blog post if you use the "share" function - I can show you how to do this next term.
00:00 - You might want to consider using an establishing shot to begin your next video; usually an ELS which defines the location. 00:07 - I like the opening pan of the car; you've managed to make this quite smooth. When you cut to the other side of the car, you've actually broken the 180degree rule (but don't worry about this, because you've not learned about it yet!) 00:10 - Your framing here is very good. 00:16 - I would suggest the a cut rather than a crossfade would be better here, since otherwise there is a suggestion of discontinuity 0:22 - Again, a well-framed shot (good mise-en-scene and composition), although I think you hold it a little too long. Would be better without the movement (i.e. the camera just locked off) 01:00 - You've used a good range of angles during the phone sequence (I particularly like the way your character walks into shot before the phone call); the main thing to work on here is the continuity, since there are some changes in the way the phone is held etc. You might also want to think about the variations of sound (e.g. the different volumes of the phone-call); in this case, dubbing the ringtone on might be a better approach 01:04 - I like the overhead shot, although it might be worth trying to find a way to make it a little more smooth (possibly counter-weighting the tripod?). Not sure about the edit at 01:04; would make more sense to edit to a front-facing LS rather than another one focused on the character's back 01:12 - I like the use of PoV. Your editing is also quite tight. It might have been worth including a shot which shows how your character got to the structure? 01:20 - The crossfade here is unnecessary; you don't need to denote passage of time 01:33 - You've shot the dialogue well - you've maintained continuity and you've used appropriate framing and editing 01:48 - You don't need the cross-fade here. I like the use of the "shaky" camera The out-takes at the end give it quite a 70s quality...!
This is a very good effort, Amy - you've included a good range of shots and the editing is generally very tight. You've been very inventive with location and you've obviously planned this out well. Overall, a very successful project - well done
I'm pleased to see you've set up a Vimeo account. You can actually embed the video in your blog post if you use the "share" function - I can show you how to do this next term.
ReplyDelete00:00 - You might want to consider using an establishing shot to begin your next video; usually an ELS which defines the location.
00:07 - I like the opening pan of the car; you've managed to make this quite smooth. When you cut to the other side of the car, you've actually broken the 180degree rule (but don't worry about this, because you've not learned about it yet!)
00:10 - Your framing here is very good.
00:16 - I would suggest the a cut rather than a crossfade would be better here, since otherwise there is a suggestion of discontinuity
0:22 - Again, a well-framed shot (good mise-en-scene and composition), although I think you hold it a little too long. Would be better without the movement (i.e. the camera just locked off)
01:00 - You've used a good range of angles during the phone sequence (I particularly like the way your character walks into shot before the phone call); the main thing to work on here is the continuity, since there are some changes in the way the phone is held etc. You might also want to think about the variations of sound (e.g. the different volumes of the phone-call); in this case, dubbing the ringtone on might be a better approach
01:04 - I like the overhead shot, although it might be worth trying to find a way to make it a little more smooth (possibly counter-weighting the tripod?). Not sure about the edit at 01:04; would make more sense to edit to a front-facing LS rather than another one focused on the character's back
01:12 - I like the use of PoV. Your editing is also quite tight. It might have been worth including a shot which shows how your character got to the structure?
01:20 - The crossfade here is unnecessary; you don't need to denote passage of time
01:33 - You've shot the dialogue well - you've maintained continuity and you've used appropriate framing and editing
01:48 - You don't need the cross-fade here. I like the use of the "shaky" camera
The out-takes at the end give it quite a 70s quality...!
This is a very good effort, Amy - you've included a good range of shots and the editing is generally very tight. You've been very inventive with location and you've obviously planned this out well. Overall, a very successful project - well done